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Any opinions on this poem?
So i made a poem called mislead, about a girl beign mislead to a point were she couldnt live without some guy, now after she realized it was all fake She broke down, so heres the poem made.
She fell in love as angels sang
Church bells began to ring
But poison lurked on the inside
Cowaring in silence behind the lies
She aloud her self to be swept off her feat
Then the feeling washed over of defeat
Obviously she didn't read between the lines
Her mind is blocked from all her cries
Then she picked up a silver blade
One that would end her pain
She cursed his name one last time
The final word before she died.
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So that's the poem it isn't supposed to be 100% just flow well so yeah, opinions would be nice
It's really good, but I think you should look over your grammer a little more like aloud should be allowed. And some other things too, but other wise it was really good.
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